Revisions

The biggest difference between my rough draft and my final paper is that its longer. Also, I added a few more details and events that i feel improved the paper. As for content, organization, focus, ect., that pretty much stayed the same. After revising my paper, i notice that i don't tend to explain everything that i bring up fully. I may give an example of something, but not explain what it means to me or why its important. Not only did the peer review help me revise my paper, but just reading through what i already had helped too. For my essay, i think the strongest point is the structure and detail. As for the weakest, it would have to be the focus. I tend to get off focus often and loose track.